Reflecting on Essay #2 Feedback

1. What surprised me the most about your comments was that you said I improved in my topic sentence. Well you didn't really mention it but you didn't put that I needed improvement in that section. What also surprised me was the same grade that I got for the last essay and I tried harder and I know that I have improved in my writing I just don't know what I need to improve on the most to get a better grade.

2.The comment I found helpful the most was the one where added the areas of improvement. I wasn't very confident t in how I was supposed to use FANBOYS. Now I know that I need to work more on adding FANBOYS to my sentences so they can connect to my ideas.

3.The comment I found least helpful was where you said that my topic sentence need to be more developed. I thought i had made an arguable point but I guess I  need to add more discussable points.

4. One area that I should focus on my next essay is that I have to stay on point with one point of view for example I noticed that I started my essay with talking in second person perspective, using "you". Then I kept reading and I was talking in first person perspective, i was using the word "I" and kept including myself. I think its fine if I use both but I have to use one perspective per paragraph. In this paragraph i think i should have focused on using the first person because I can relate to this topic about equal education myself.

5. I think I could have gotten at least a B on this particular essay because I worked hard on it. I made sure that my paragraphs had PIE structure I tried using some FANBOYS. I met with my pass the torch tutor twice a week to go over the outline because the outline would determine the main ideas and what was going to be written on paper. 

6. I will use FANBOYS and make sure I have discussable main points in my body paragraphs or else my essay won't have much information it. ALso I need to make a strong topic sentence for every body paragraph so it can interest the reader to continue reading the rest of the essay   

Unit 3: Social Media, Community and Democracy Generating Ideas about the Value of Social Media in a Democracy

1.     What are the differences between “weak ties” and “strong ties” ? 

I think the differences between weak ties and strong ties is if a person has connections. Weak ties is when a person doesn't have connections. For example, When a person has a Facebook and they have a lot of friends on Facebook but they are not really friends they are only acquaintances. Unlike the strong ties is when people have connections as friends and they know they can help them get somewhere with their help. Those are strong ties when you know people from different places that way you have different connections.

1.     What causes cyber activism? 

Cyber activism is caused by people who are stuck in there offices or home that are too busy to communicate with others face to face. I think that cyber activism also happens because it's way faster to communicate through emails than by calling someone or going to look for someone to talk to them face to face. I just think its way faster and more effective today.