I think my introduction is my strongest paragraph because I have a thesis that shows Lessing's proposal. Also, I show if I agree or disagree with her proposal and I also explained why I agreed with her. It's a good introduction because I go in depth in what Group minds is, why group minds is a problem and why does it happen. I went in depth in those particular sections and I used quotes from Dorris Lessing's article as evidence and why I think those certain things.
My weakest paragraph is paragraph number 3 because I didn't go in to depth on the reason why I agree that individuals need to use their facts and information to prove their points and to not fall in the group mind category. I think that my point isn't clear enough because I just put the reason on what I think people should do. I didn't say what I thought about individuals not using and using the information they have. Also, I feel like I need to develop my ideas based on Lessing's proposal, and giving my opinion so the reader can understand my argument as well.
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