1. By reading my peers essays i found interesting how we had different examples, but all of our main points were based on how education is not equal and that education is very important in todays society. I learn how our ideas can be stated differently but mean the same thing and have the same focus on one main point. that's something I found very interesting while I was reflecting on my essay.
2. Yes, my peers suggested that I change my thesis in a form were I'm not just listing the main points but more like giving a description of the main points. That way when I go in depth in my body paragraphs there i can list my opinion.
3. Yes my peers gave me helpful suggestions in which they say that I do not have enough explanation of the main point that I am trying to prove and I don't have enough explanation of the quote or the information that I used to try to explain my point. I will change my weakest paragraph by adding explanation that actually will make sense.
4. I used the PIE structure throughout my whole essay because thats the structure for each paragraph. I would write my point in a paper and leave a space under it, then I would look for a quote or I would think of a personal experience and i would write it down under the the main point. Then, I would explain how the evidence would relate to the main point. But i would only explain how they would relate i didn't explain why they I thought they related.
5. So far based on my peers responses I would say that my introduction is my strongest part of the essay because I include everything that needs to go in the introduction. I used one of the papers susie gas me to write the introduction it's the one where it gives you piece by piece of the details that have to be in the intro.
6. I think I need to focus a lot on the organization of my body paragraphs. The information that I have for the main point is very strong but I just need to learn how to make the explanation fit in to the information. For example on my weakest paragraph I wrote the quote but i didn't go in depth in why the quote related to the main point and I did not explain what I thought about it.
7. The question I asked my group was "does my body paragraph relate up to my thesis? Can you find my thesis?" thats the question I asked my peers and they said yes that they can easily find my thesis and that it was strong but they told me that I needed to change my thesis like the structure of it because it sounds like I'm listing the concepts instead of giving a description of it in the introduction and then going in depth in the body paragraphs.
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